How to start a cover letter: 6 attention grabbing intros + examples

• The contact information you should include in a cover letter
• The best greeting to use in a cover letter
• Attention-grabbing ways to start an NZ cover letter

The first things you’ll see on a cover letter are the names and contact details information for both the intended reader, and yourself. These should be formatted like a letter (as in the old timey paper things we used to send before we had emails). If this doesn’t make sense, you can check out the templates linked above to see what we mean. 

At the top left of the cover letter, you should include:

• The manager's name 
• The manager’s job title 
• The company name 
• The physical address from the company

At the top right, you should include: 

• Your full name 
• Your email address 
• Your phone number

Before you start working your wordsmith magic, you need to say hello … the right way.

You may see this section referred to as a ‘cover letter salutation’, but we’ll stick with ‘greeting’, because we aren’t from the Middle Ages. The ideal cover letter greeting looks like this:

• “Dear James Webster,”

Easy as.

Use ‘Dear’, because it’s a formal letter, and address it to the recruiter or hiring manager by using their full name. This is often included in the job listing, or can usually be found easily by stalking the company website.

We recommend putting serious time into finding a name when addressing your cover letter – this tiny bit of personalisation goes a long way. 

Even if you’re not 100% sure it’s right, no one will penalise you for addressing the letter to the head of the department the role sits within. If you’re applying to a really small business, you could even go with the owner – it shows you tried. 

Failing all of this, the next best option is, ‘Dear Hiring Manager’. While it lacks the personal touch, this greeting works because it’s basically invisible. It’s not as cold as ‘To whom it may concern’ (avoid this at all costs), and not overly informal like, ‘Hi there’.

None of the below examples are better than the others, we just gave you a choice to fit your personal style, and the type of role you’re applying for.

Enthusiasm for the role and/or company always goes down well. While it’s important not to come across as fake, when done well, this intro can really help you stand out.

Example:

“I was hugely excited to see the assistant restaurant manager role you’re listing on Trade Me Jobs. I’m an experienced head waiter, with a track record of effective leadership and a passion for delivering great customer experiences. What’s more, I’ve been a loyal customer of yours for years, and would love to join your team!”

While some careers (think doctors, teachers and charity workers) are considered ‘callings’, personal values are becoming increasingly important across New Zealand’s job market.

If you think it’s appropriate, a value-led cover letter can be highly memorable.

Example:

“Businesses should take climate change seriously. As a software engineering graduate with a passion for sustainability, I believe technology is key to making the commercial sector greener. Your reputation for pioneering this technology, and partnering with businesses to implement it, excites me, and I’d love to become part of your mission.”

Evidence-backed success stories grab the reader’s attention, and get them thinking about the improvements you could make to their company. The trick here is to get your message over without appearing arrogant.

Example:

“In the last 18 months, I’ve beaten my quarterly sales target by a minimum of X%, every time. In total, this has brought in an additional $XX,XXX of revenue for the business. I’d love to bring this track record, and my passion for customer service, to the Sales Manager position listed on Trade Me Jobs.”

If someone within the company recommended you apply for the job, make sure the hiring manager knows. Why? They see hundreds of applications a day, and if yours is backed by someone who’s already landed a job at the company, that means something.

Example:

“I was excited to learn about the Social Media Manager role from my former colleague, Lauren Irvine. She and I worked together running digital and social campaigns for a wide variety of companies at BUSINESS NAME. She thought my skills and personality would be a good match for your team.”

Another way to make your application easy for the hiring manager is by including a link to your online job profile, or portfolio of work. Today, employers often want to check out your digital presence, and this platform lets them build a better picture of you by viewing your skills and experience at the click of a button.

Employers aren’t interested in someone who’s just turning up to earn a salary. They want to hire an employee who’s passionate about what their organisation does, and will bring this energy to work every day. Your cover letter is a great place to get this dedication across, as long as you get the tone right. Too gushy, and the reader might think you’re being disingenuous, too laid back and they might not feel the passion coming through. 

Example: 

“I’ve been passionate about conservation since my parents took me on a whale watching tour as a child. Throughout my schooling and career since then, I’ve been focussed on finding a role that allows me to help protect the wonderful marine wildlife we have here in New Zealand.”